Freestyle- What happened to piety

well I know no one comes to the blog any more! in fact i can right whatever i want here.. blah blah blah! anyways :p i was supposed to write some poem for a small magazine, and like always i missed deadline, and hence i freestyled them sumn in like 5 mins :S thought id archive it here

What happened to piety?
To prayer, devotion, and sincerity?
Why do I claim to be a believing man?
While the heart is void from the remembrance of Quran
While the eyes are polluted by the sins of the land
While I have yet to submit to Allah’s commands

How can we claim to love, The One?
When his submission, is outweighed by dismay and fun
While tears have dried, and the heart has sunk
By venomous devils our faiths were stung

How can we expect to be rewarded and blessed
When our faiths are eroded, rusted and wrecked
While we threw away our children to be captured in nets
To be brain washed, and abused, to follow the rest
While we left the understanding of the original text

How we hope to enter the eternal paradise?
How can we hope to please The Eternal, The Wise?
How can we call ourselves Muslims, with such pride?
How can we fulfill the purpose of our life?
- Except to hope for the mercy, of the Most Forgiving on our side